Mavis

2007/05/01

Summary of the Graduation Present

A young man had admired a sports car and told his father that was all he wanted. On the morning of his graduation, his father handed him a Bible. The young man was angry and stormed out of the house. After many years, the young man was very successful in business but he had not seen his father since that graduation day. Before he could make arrangements, he received a telegram telling him his father had passed away. When he arrived at his father's house, he saw the Bible he had left it years ago. He opened the Bible and a car key dropped from the back of the Bible.It was the key of the sports car he had desired. On the tag was the date of his graduation.

1 個意見:

Blogger Ariel's castle 提到...

1.This summary is very understadable for readers.
2.It is clear that Mavis cites correctly of its details.
3.But the thesis statment seens not so clear.
4.In this summary, there no the same thesis of the original essay.
5.Mavis didn't lost any key points in her summary, I think.
6.Mavis didn't write any her own opinions in it.
7.I think Mavis put some unimportant details in the summary. Like from the man received a telegram...here. It seens can ues shorter describe on it.
8.I think Mavis wrote very clearly and very detail in her summary.

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